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Life is a prison

Life is a prison,
Oh God let me out,
No one to listen,
To hear when you shout,
Climb the walls of insanity,
Ride the waves of despair,
If you fall it dont matter,
No one to care,
Used to wish for a window,
To see the birds,trees and sky,
But your better without one,
Stop you aiming to high,
Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away,
Seeing joy,love,and happiness,
Another price that you pay,
Strong is good,Weak is bad,
Be it false,Be it true,
Your mind makes the choice,
And inforces it too,
Cell walls built by society,
rules to adhere,
If you breech the acceptable,
You had better beware,
Hide the pain carry on,
Routine is the key,
Dont let on that your not,
What your pretending to be,
Lock it all up inside you,
How badly that bodes,
Look out for that one day,
When it all just explodes,
Leaving 'naught but a shell,
Base funcinality too,
But killing all else,
That was uniquely you,
So how do you grow,
With a time bomb inside?
Or how to defuse it,
Without destroying its ride?
You can't.


                                        -Poet_Laurete-
— Dark.Poetress, Mar 14, 2010

Critiques

M

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Great one

Hello Poet and if you do not mind I have corrected for you the couple of small tweaks here. Next time you use your spellcheck and you will have caught the typos' or misspellings. And your spacing too. I hope you don't mind me doing this and if so let me know. Afterall it is YOUR poem your work of art. Just in helping you poet that's all. A good write nonetheless!! Life is a prison, Oh God let me out, No one to listen, To hear when you shout, Climb the walls of insanity, Ride the waves of despair, If you fall it don't matter, No one to care, Used to wish for a window, To see the birds,trees and sky, But your better without one, Stop you from aiming too high, Watching freedom is painful, For those locked away, Seeing joy,love,and happiness, Another price that you pay, Strong is good,Weak is bad, Be it false, Be it true, Your mind makes the choice, And enforces it too, Cell walls built by society, rules to adhere, If you breech the acceptable, You had better beware, Hide the pain,carry on, Routine is the key, Don't let on that your not, What your pretending to be, Lock it all up inside you, How badly that bodes, Look out for that one day, When it all just explodes, Leaving ‘naught but a shell, Base functionality too, But killing all else, That was uniquely you, So how do you grow, With a time bomb inside? Or how to defuse it, Without destroying its ride? You can’t. Love, Mona
Dark.Poetress

Dark.Poetress

16 years ago

Thanks

Actually, i don't mind, thanks for doing that Mona, I hope you will be able to read my latest write soon bye!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

However, only no one knows

However, only no one knows you better. Escape is futile...the Borg. ~A "To love another person is to see the face of God." Les Miserables

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