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Evolution for Kids. My thanks to Jess for his help. Bern

In the beginning Magma
as in the broiling Sun,
Then the Cosmic explosion,
the Stars had begun

Fiery balls of Matter
thrown into Space,
with nothing but Gravity
to hold them in place.

The long cooling process
of the outer shell,
[Millions of years went by
a very short spell]
Gasses composed of Hydrogen,
Oxygen, and Carbon dioxide,
not even a tiny Microbe
had a place to hide.

Fierce storms of thunder
and lightning bold,
getting the Planet ready
, as the Crust turned cold.
Gasses mixed together
H2O and Water were born,
Water that nothing on this Earth could scorn.

Vast Seas and Oceans
evaporating to cause rain,
Another Cycle of life
without which all would be in vain.
The Earth shuddered the beginning
of the early Earthquakes

Torrential rains continually
forming huge inland Lakes.

Meteorites hit the newly forming Earth,
Bringing from Outer space
Spores that promised birth.
Slowly over millions
of years of chaotic force,
Amoeba and plankton developed in due course.

Millions more years went slowly by,
with the light of the Sun
filling the Earthly Sky.
Ferns and Trees of wondrous shapes,
Covered the Earth
with their varied green capes.
Life developed in the Oceans,
Primitive indeed,
and each individual one carrying
the Evolutionary seed.

Then the Amphibians ventured onto dry land,
The Apes in the trees were very prolific;
some ventured onto the ground
and that was terrific.
From primitive Apes to modern man,
one very short step in
Natures bounteous plan.
Civilizations following one after another
until this very day,
Homo sapiens or modern Man has come here to stay
early forms of Creatures did ever expand

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— Bernard Shaw, Mar 22, 2010

Critiques

Rett

Rett

16 years 2 months ago

Bern, good job

A really good idea, put together quite nicely. Well thought out. A few minor punctuation errors and a little overdone on the water and h20 lines, but otherwise, quite well crafted. A bit more editing and this will go from a good poem to an excellent one. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

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