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The Wise Man at His End

The Wise Man at His End

 “Though wise men at their end know dark is right,Because their words had forked no lightning theyDo not go gentle into that good night.”  Dylan Thomas

 

 

The poetry he writes will not ignite

His verses fork no lightning in the sky,

Dylan. Raging he goes into that night.

 

He writes, he writes, he writes, but all seems trite

He tries, He tries, a never ending try.

The poetry he writes will not ignite

 

His flint and steel words cannot spark a light

The pages fill, but still the flame defy,

Dylan, Raging he goes into that night.

 

A welder’s arc, a line of power and might

He hopes a perfect bead gets more than by.

The poetry he writes will not ignite.

 

Emotions hot, his heart on fire takes flight

A strain soars out . . . all ash . . . and dusty dry,

Dylan, Raging he goes into that night.

 

You said it well my friend, you said it right

Without forked lightning there is no good bye.

The poetry he writes will not ignite,

Dylan, Raging he goes into that night.


— Clem, Apr 07, 2010

Critiques

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anonymous1

16 years 2 months ago

Nice Example of the Villanelle

Nicely executed. I relate to the sentiments expressed in this piece. He writes, he writes, he writes, but all seems trite He tries, He tries, a never ending try. The poetry he writes will not ignite (This is me) I only question comma or period after Dylan in the 5th stanza; the other lines use a period so the line reads as if addressed to Dylan. Is that how you meant it? I really like this poem. Thanks, Lisa
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Clem

16 years 2 months ago

It's me too!!!

Thank you for the comments. It's me too. In fact first draft I had it all in first person because it felt so comfortable. And yes every time I use Dylan it is a noun of address, hence the commas. Thanks again. Curt
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anonymous1

16 years 2 months ago

Dylan

Cool. Then in the 5th stanza, you have Dylan(,) instead of Dylan(.) Do you see it? Has to be perfect for judging :) Again, I really love this. Lisa
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Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Great V, Curt, all the

Great V, Curt, all the nuance and essence intact and demonstrated! ~A "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles
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ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

hi good to read you again , i find it hard to get time to go around on everyone , but this is good stuf and i can see you put alot of your self in this gets my nom ,,,zigs
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Clem

16 years 2 months ago

Cool

Cool, Ziggy, and thank you. I bet just about all of us on Neo feel the dismay that our lines just won't ignite. Curt

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