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Exorcising a nightmare

when a dream seeped
into a dome of light,
I was already leaping
with tale of grand sights

I was falling into
days consciousness
but a demonic spell
had begun to possess

in a depth of sleep
in the quietest dark,
I felt a presence
slide to make a spark

a nightmare of jowls
shadowed his face,
then his slimy fingers
stuck into my grace

he took my thoughts
on a hellish ride,
I was hoping my mind
didn't burst open wide
 
the torture of angels
struggling on the racks,
was matched by the faeries
whip-marks on their backs

the mushrooms of love
had fungus and warts,
a cathedral of dreams
slipped out of all thought

with unicorns hobbled
and chains on their legs,
the elves head bandages
held together with pegs 

the beautiful sights
I had run back to tell,
was lost in a nightmare
as I was living in hell

but endless this horror
well, it wasn't to be,
as I write this poem
that dream is set free

but that's not to say
that it wont return,
as I sleep in the night
dreams start to burn


— Seren, Apr 08, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Oh I am so biting my tongue

Oh I am so biting my tongue right now lol thanks for the comment is all I shall say and the read, i was about to throw the computer out the window it wouldnt save my edit lmao love wifey x x x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dale sometimes our time is

Dale sometimes our time is limited mine has been today, I appreciate whatever you give ... there are many nights I dont give a poem its proper due but I dont beat myself up about it I just give them a much better comment the next time ... thats the joy of Neopoet there is no set standard for commenting you give what you can thats all any of us can do ... the comment you left i was going to look at when I edited thats why I asked ?? why ?? lol have a good day its early hours of the morning here love JayCee
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

every now and then I get

every now and then I get short on Neotime so instead of answering all the comments on my poems I put one answer on and then spend the rest of my time commenting on friends work ... eh I dont care how many spots you take just dont abuse me and we will get on perfectly lmao Just joking ;) love JayCee
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Exorcising or exercising?

Exorcising or exercising? lol. And quit peeking in on my dreams! Love, Mum "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I found this good fun and

I found this good fun and loved the play with the words JayCee. Ingenious. Rosina xena465
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne

Your dreams are as weird as my own, LOL! These two verses are a little weak imo. They just need a little bit of work, but I have no suggestions: but endless this horror well, it wasn’t to be, as I write this poem that dream is set free but that’s not to say that it wont return, as I sleep in the night dreams start to burn Love, Cat
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

wow

what an awful waking distortion to your 'grand sights' jc i think i've had a similar experience a demonic spell indeed. love judd
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

You exorcist of the attics of fantasy

Ann of Norway This reminds me of the feeling I get when reading "Gormenghast" by Mervyn Peake where the players in the story are wierd and wonderful. I shall have to find it for later I cannot find the quote but you shall have it, it would suit your style to read that and others of that specially strange man's works. I have already quoted his sound poem the one in the cathedral. Will be back for more must to bed good night all Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks to all for the read

Thanks to all for the read of this one its not quite done yet will finish it in the weeks ahead ... I appreciate all the wonderful comments left and when I do an edit i will take them all into consideration love JayCee x x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Jayne

Those nasty things have got you and they wont let go, this is a lovely read in its horror of being lost in that place there you will reside until you can see yopurself again, to carry on you will have to find that you in there that will battle this thing, lol I supose there are people within those dreams and it must be hard for them, then there is you in there and as in a maze it is so easy to comeout by keeping the wall on your left all the time but in dreams you have to find that pure creature that they cannot touch, I can see this series going on a bit. I will send a child to guide you as they are the only ones that have unconditional love which will beat any deamons, You take care of that precious one called Jayne, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

and you know me too well lol

and you know me too well lol ... I have been a little lost lately but I am OK ... I will mess up that lawn soon enough your grass will be warm with a summer sun, mine will be cold with winter lol ... I dream all the time if I wrote half my dreams I would have men in white coats saying "come on huni easy does it" lmao ... thanks for your beautiful comment I am writing one, I actually like at the moment if I finish it in time i might post tonight well see how I go lol love and biggest hugs to you both JayCee x x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Little Lady

As you are probably aware I have a garden that is about 7 feet wide and 12 feet long, my lawn is spread from here to where ever you want to stand it is a Spirit think lawn, to let you feel the healing and the unconditional love of all those there, Yours as always Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

It sounds like a peaceful

It sounds like a peaceful place Ian ... and nothing nicer than walking with bare feet on soft grass ... we have some pretty hard grass here in australia some of its NOT pleasant to walk on lol ...love to you both JayCee x x x
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

Remember you wake from a

Remember you wake from a dream and wake within a nightmare, your poem has lyrical qualitys and demonic insights- nice combination -Club Special
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Brian Thanks for the

Dear Brian Thanks for the comment this one was funny, part dream part my creation I will leave it to others imaginations to decide which is which lol love and hugs JayCee
P

paparazii

16 years 2 months ago

Beautful

We all have them, some of them even team up from the line of childhood--every darkness has a trend of nightmares, the more you think of what can be in the dark, the more real it becomes to denies that you're alone--that's how the boogies of darkness are manifested.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

No such thing as the

No such thing as the boogieman lol shhhh ... I have a love hate relationship with the dark ... one part of me likes it the other doesnt thanks for the comment love JayCee

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