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Millage
Apr 12, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Silent suicide

Tonight
I've made up my mind
With thoughts so unkind
I'm outta here
I'll take
Private initiation
Of inebriation
And you can cheer

You can put the flags out
Can dance and shout
I'll exit stage right
You can pop the champagne
And cheer again and again
I'm out of your sight

At last
You'll hear me no more
What you've waited for
I'll slip away
No more
Treacle sickly words from me
Or wearing my heart on my sleeve
Your sanity is saved

You can hang up the bunting
Musicians can start trumpeting
No need to hide
I don't even need the manners
To acknowledge your banners
With my silent suicide
— Millage, Apr 12, 2010
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xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I’m thinking you don’t

I'm thinking you don't actually mean suicide as the end of your life, more the end of a relationship? Great write. Rosina xena465
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Flattered...

... that you read something else into this Rosina, rather than just assuming the worst. Thank you for your comments and kind words. Much love Millage x
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Perhaps you should read my

Perhaps you should read my new poem, that'll cheer you up...then again, maybe not a good idea Millage? Rosina xena465
lou

lou

16 years ago

Suicide

Suicide is painless so the song says, never understood that!! Relationships are hard . Good poem Lou xx
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Lou

Suicide is only painless if you succeed. When you find yourself in hospital surround with drips and life-support having failed, it's painful to watch what it did to family and friends. Also, most people who commit suicide, or attempt, it's not what they really want and it's a blessing in the end when you don't succeed Lou...speaking from experience. Rosina xena465
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Millage

16 years ago

Very kind

I thank you for taking the time to read my work. Much love Millage x
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magics02

16 years ago

Oh Millage

WHere have you been all this time. I know you needed a break from it but your silent suicide shall not be silent. You stick around and write your poems as I missed them and you. Hope all is fine with you and the family and would love to see your work up here again. Nice to see you back Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mile man

I know of two reasons ... going to keep them to myself though ... I dont see you as the suicidal type and if you did I would come over and kick your ass loved your poem only a couple of lines I will tweak llet me know if you would like some pointers love and hugs JayCee x x x P.S have missed your face around my friend ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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