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a whistle in the dark


==

a whistle
in the dark


suffering does not
belong to me; suffering
calls on everyone;

the time to remind
myself of that is when I'm
full of suffering;

yes, that
is best,
I think;

and if I'm not right
about that, I won't worry
over it: at

least one other thought
will find me in time to adjust;
tell me if I'm wrong,

please

==
— barbsdad2003, Apr 12, 2010

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loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

to suffer

Suffering is part and parcel Of this only life’s Long sojourn That twas so In my youth My dad did me warn Thus I never was ever Till today forlorn LOVED BY ONE AND ALL
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Suffering and love is the

Suffering and love is the universal thread. Not two. So glad to see your return Barb's dad. Love, Anna "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Chuck

You aren't wrong. Suffering is universal, and as Anna says, so is love. I think they both are the same pair of gloves. Always, Cat
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I read your comment to Cat

Wise and wonderful words to her, and your poem is a credit to your words too Chuck...Brill Rosina xena465
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 2 months ago

Exquisite use of punctuation and enjambment

I often suffer from envy of your skills but then a thought occurs to lead me elsewhere. May I say, I feel the plaintiff nature of the ending somehow lacks "Chuckness". Or tell me how I mis-read, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible
B

barbsdad2003

16 years 2 months ago

Always ...

tryin' out somethin' new, I am, I am. Don't think you misread, Jess. Part of the message has to do with uncertainty ... and a willingness to listen to whomever. I do think uncertainness shadows struggle somehow, maybe like a remora about to attach itself to shark. Well, maybe that's not such a good analogy. I'm sure you can come up with something better. Respect your opinion(s). Always. Thanx, Chuck PS: Another thought sticks in my brain: I thought it chancy to pen a poem about thought or thoughts. The ending I think blends in (at least by implication) a little feeling/emotion, which probably assisted in bringing it to life ... somehow. My father bored the bulk of my childhood practically to tears by his constant hash and rehash of things philosophical ... and with nary a glimmer of feeling to make any of it very real. As well it lacked warmth (and kept an emotional distance firmly between us). The warmth I missed out on I would've loved to get from him. Even to this day I find myself bored by discussion of things philosophical. Especially if it goes on for more than a few seconds. Such discussion on his part to me always seemed like a form of Solitaire, being that the speaker wasn't speaking to me ... but rather to himself.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

May I say I echo all the

May I say I echo all the above comments wonderful to have you back Chuck love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

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