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Overcast

The waves draw near
As I look down to the amber sand
Through the water I see a face
of whom I cannot place

The oncoming surge brings to me a voice
and all is washed away

The wind is almost here
As I look up to the overcast
In the clouds I see a shape
If only my words could just escape

The racing winds deliver a whisper
and all is left a blur

The sun bursts through the overcast
As the winds retreat
the waves become discrete
From the water emerges a pair of feet

The sun blocks out his face
and at once I look back down to the ground

His plethora of greatness
And the ambiance of his beach
Leaves me breathless and stiff
With every single whiff

Unable to look up, I imagine a face
that if I walked by faith and not by sight
receive a quick glance I simply might
— Carchuleto, Apr 18, 2010

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ifoundaplace

ifoundaplace

16 years 1 month ago

Chris,

I really enjoy reading your poetry Chris. It really calls to my attention. Good job. Hunter (:
M

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Just feeling this one strongly

Thats a five starrer for me to you also, I really felt this as I read it and was also awe inspired by your growth in your poetry Carch. Amazing that is all I can say for now Amazing. Kudos to you Love Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 1 month ago

Mona youre back!

hey I never got to thank you for this comment. Im glad it can be seen(my growth, that is) by you and others. Glad you are back, as I missed you so much! *hugs*
M

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Chris

Yes happy to be back and to see my friends work here. I notice a big difference in your poetry and want to say Kudos to you guy, you are doing great and how about that band practice. You still keeping up with your music I hope. Talk to you soon honey, weather is getting nice now!!! Summer sun on it's way Love Mona xoxoxo miss ya guy!! TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Indi and Dani

Im starting to get a grasp on which direction my writing needs to go. Thank you both for your support thus far.
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Chris

This is the first time reading one of your poems, my lose...like Indi said "WoW" Brill ***** Rosina xena465
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 1 month ago

Hope

something that I have, for the longest time, struggled to understand. Up until now I have wanted everything laid out before me instead of relying on faith to guide my way of discovery. Thank you for your kind words :) Carch
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Carch

I do believe that this is one of the best writes I have read from you well done I will be looking forward to more lol hint lol love JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne :)

thank you so much for your read and comment. It overjoys me to see that you, and others are enjoying my writing. This one just kinda came out when I was trying to write another one. Much thanks, Carch

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