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stuck

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stuck

the key, it sticks in
the backdoor lock, a
bootless thought frozen

in memory;

beaver smacks surface
at predawn/postnight, dives her
shallow dunk; curious

yet,

on resurfacing
she circles back, slaps again---
a punctuation

of morning's herald
sentence, an alert, warning,
a busied flea in

the hasty ear ...

the key, it sticks in
the backdoor lock like a thought
frozen in memory's

vaunted

bank, in its vaulted
box that circles, rotates---clue-
less, keyless---lacking

useful intent or
a darkened tunnel's farthest
end ...

==
— barbsdad2003, Apr 22, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Chuck

you never disappoint ... this is just brilliant I ran out of superlatives long ago ... bloody brilliant write is one I dont think I have used lol (hugs) love JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
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barbsdad2003

16 years 1 month ago

I've ...

gotta admit I've not seen bloody brilliant. And prob'ly'd remember it if I had. Looks like you're havin' lotsa fun here. Good place for it. Your visit, attention, comment ... all appreciated. Hugs right back, Chuck
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Nice one Chuck

I see you stole my word `Dunk` ha, ha, ha...or did I steal yours. A true poets write...Brilliant Rosina xena465
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barbsdad2003

16 years 1 month ago

I do think ...

I got to it before you patented (copyrighted?) the word. Dunk's a great word whenever you don't want to include the r after the d (except after c?). Hope I'm making sense. For me making sense is never common, always peculiar. Thanx for the visit, the comment. As usual, much appreciated. Chuck
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Got it Chuck

Better to be `Dunked` than `Drunk`!!! Rosina xena465
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Chuck

I am happy to say, whenever I visit your page, I find something original and different. You never disappoint. Always, Cat
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manawa

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Chuck Lovely

Hi Chuck Lovely images moving between worlds keys locks dunking beavers memories cheers Manawa
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barbsdad2003

16 years 1 month ago

I walk ...

before dawn and, on leaving the house, I lock the backdoor, which in the dark can be a challenge to see---let alone the sticking-key problem. And then on my return from the two-miler, the dawn light's just present enough for me to sneak a peek at the creek (hah! that rhymes!) and catch beaver at his/her duties. So of course they tie together. And I've gotta add to them the idea that an annoying thought can be a sticky thing, too, refusing to let go even when desired of it. Oh, well. There's more, of course. Of course. Regards, Chuck

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