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Ornaments of the sky

The sun shines deep,
with a rare golden light,
into my skin it will seep,
taking strength past flesh,bone,and sight.


Sunset is a special,special mix,
of beauty and hopes for all,
it is painted by artists  as a permanent fix,
it has like the leaves of fall.


Then night time will come,
only silence shall come to call,
the beauty of night can make you numb,
The moon shining high like a silver glass ball.



-Ash Knight



— Dark.Poetress, Apr 24, 2010

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear P.L.., I loved

Dear P.L.., I loved the title. Your language use was excellent. I thought the piece flowed very well. I really enjoyed the theme. The last line seems a tad long: The moon shining high like a silver glass ball, maybe. Excellent work! P.

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