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The Grave Man at His End

The Grave Man at His End   The grave man is a giant by his weigh.As a child he wore suitcoat, tie, and hatA Pharisee demanding his fair say. A dust cloud follows from his stomp and swayAnd storm clouds when he deems to have a chatThe grave man is a giant by his weigh. The children stop their prattling and playWhen grave man’s shadow falls where they are atA Pharisee demanding his fair say. And when he puts a small smile on displayThe curs and cats will skitter and will scatThe grave man is a giant by his weigh. He never gives a kiss or a bouquetHe always takes a tit for every tatA Pharisee demanding his fair say. So Dylan, he does not go gently, nayHe thinks he has eternity down pat.The grave man is a giant by his weigh.A Pharisee demanding his fair say.  
— Clem, Apr 24, 2010

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

this poem ways heavily,

this poem ways heavily, effectively, but perhaps needs some redemptive aspect? The reader yearns for some insight at his end, not that you need to pander to your reader. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

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