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in the heat

==

--

     There is a Reaper whose 
                                        name is Death,
         And with his sickle keen,
     He reaps the bearded grain 
                                        at a breath,
         And the flowers that grow 
                                        between
                                                ---Longfellow
--

in
the
heat

and sweat, the labor,
the misery forced on me by
high-country Colorado

summer's

afternoon sun, I
yank one more bale from ground to
brink of truck bed, its

green

timothy fragrant
to the nose were I of a
proper mind to notice;

however,

I do make out,
albeit in the brief flyby
of bale from earth to

creeping

truck, the mangled corpse,
the freshly broken/splintered
bones, the blood-caked fur

of

a simple mouse crushed,
caught by machinery made
for packaging fallen

hay

from their rows downfield,
and not, it would seem to me,
made for baling mice

==

— barbsdad2003, May 07, 2010

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Marie-I-Be

16 years 1 month ago

subtleties of brilliance

Chuck, when I read (or hear read to me) a poem touching upon several senses in the gentle way that you accomplish here, I am moved to levels of feeling---and thinking---which invite me to linger to enjoy the images and multiple messages placed layer upon layer by the author and also to enjoy those which may be available uniquely to me as an individual with my own personal complexities of living experience. In my opinion, your poem here is one of your very best ever! Sweat, labor, misery, sun, brink, timothy fragrant, proper mind, flyby, creeping, mangled, broken, splintered, crushed, packaging ... these carefully chosen words and others usher in a flood of action pictures and fluctuating emotions for me. I appreciate subtleties of brilliance, and your "in the heat" piece is pleasantly packed with it. Fantastic job, Chuck.
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barbsdad2003

16 years 1 month ago

Wow!

I suppose my only appropriate response here is to bow deeply, which of course means that eventually I'll have to straighten myself---something a bit more stressful than the bowing by its lonesome. Further, don't want the library staff calling 911 to pull me back straight. But all that's beside my point. Nice to see you here. Glad you took the time to read and comment. The details in your response reveal just how much you care ... and how very truthful/candid you are. Something I value highly. Thanx, Chuck
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Marie-I-Be

16 years 1 month ago

Chuck

I also like the placement of the right-on Longfellow quote and the visual appeal of your poem's layout. Nice spacing and lining. Now off I go, still feeling sorry for the poor little mouse!
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barbsdad2003

16 years ago

Can't help ...

but notice your latest profile pic. If that's your husband, he's in need of a bit of diet/exercise help. Ooops! Maybe I shouldn't've said that. Mustn't give offense, you know. Especially here. At this site, I mean. No. As a matter of fact, I know (of) your hubby. The pic for sure does not do him justice! Yours, Chuck
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Marie-I-Be

16 years ago

Brave Boy

You are a very brave boy.

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