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Wings

If I had wings to fly,
I'd breathe in deep,
And spread them wide,
As I'd leap from the cliff,
Into the wind,
Where the gulls glide,

Crossing the wide sea,
I'd glide above cruel waves,
That reach up to drown my flight,
in their cold,
Deep blue-green graves,

And as your day grows slowly light,
I'd arrive on worn-out wings,
To hold you,
In your waking dreams,
And feel you strong,
But gently warm,
In my embrace at last.
— Dark.Poetress, May 19, 2010

Critiques

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scribbler

16 years ago

wings

not a great fan of free form.Guess not smart enough,but this short,whimsical poem had very nice flow.Perhaps in lines 4 and 8,replace "I" with"I'd".Keep up the good work.......scribbler
Dark.Poetress

Dark.Poetress

16 years ago

thx

thanks scribbler will do, oh, and i updated mt profile =)
Dark.Poetress

Dark.Poetress

16 years ago

Thanks

Thanks Mona =) Don't worry, i'll always be back though so no need to fret lol. a poets poems never end! Isolation is not being in a room alone, but being in a room full of people who ignore your existence.
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magics02

16 years ago

I hear you

Just get to know more people and get more involved with the site as there is much to learn here. That is how I got to know many people reaching out to other poets here.. Yes will be back for visit soon Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived

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