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thomassbaby
May 29, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Depth Of My Soul

                                                                                   In the depth of my soul,
                                                                                        I was in control.
                                                                               But my emotions took hold,
                                                                           And my soul was left to be torn.
                                                                      I didn't have any accusations to say,
                                                                  When I found out I could see you today.
                                                                             You were in my life before,
                                                                        But we left and I turned to stone.
                                                                       With the depth of my love for you,
                                                                                 Broken and all alone.

— thomassbaby, May 29, 2010
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Arrow

16 years ago

Heartfelt and

endearingly simple but I found the end confusing. I think of stone as hard and as inconsistent with love. I also think of love as giving strength and not as resulting in brokenness or coldness. That is something else, I think: betrayal, need, I'm not sure. The punctuation is also confusing at the end which adds to the problem.

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