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barbsdad2003
Jun 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

as

==

as

I
discover new
worlds, I thereby thrust them live
into my consciousness;
and,

thus
freed from my prior
ignorance, they take
root, grow, they flourish,
they

robust
bloom---

              some substantially
              more than others,
              of course--

and
all are actions,
behaviors, events that
bequeath to me
the

most
perfect joy
imaginable

==
— barbsdad2003, Jun 03, 2010

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anonymous1

16 years ago

Lovely way to express growth.

Dear Chuck, Your poem is perfect. I like the idea - at least the idea I'm taking away - that qualities, like worlds, are cultivated, created in us and by us and can bring us joy. A good thing to ponder for the day. Thank you, Lisa
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Joy, however, is no-thing

Joy, however, is no-thing unless it is shared. ;-) ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
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barbsdad2003

16 years ago

I like that:

"imagination tuned." Am I right that if I keep the imagination tuned, I don't have to sing? My son---who died at 20, by the way, of cystic fibrosis---always wanted to be a singer (and even contemplated pursuing it), a preposterous want, actually, coming from one with CF. I, of course, have different reasons for not exploring a singing career. Thanx, Chuck
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

and in the joy and beauty of

and in the joy and beauty of your words ... beautifully written Chuck I find nothing to crit nominated love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
loved

loved

16 years ago

From darkness of....

From darkness of ignorance We emerge Succinctly Bountiful With knowledge As we hold our heads upright In this wavering universe... lovely perception urs
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barbsdad2003

16 years ago

Hey!

As to your comment, loved, 'twould make quite a good poem. I think, in fact, better than are many at this site. Go ahead. Do it. Post it. I mean as a poem in the stream. Thanx, Chuck PS: I think I'm in love with your ducks on the water. So peaceful.
loved

loved

16 years ago

Are you sure

....after the detailed email you sent me grounding me for ever then i shall as my quota permits thanks for ur kind permission
themoonman

themoonman

16 years ago

Hi Chuck...

I liked the theme of this very much, I hope you don't mind, but there were a couple of stumbles for me and I thought I could point them out. robust... robustly, I just felt it would make it flow easier, it's the way I wanted to say it out loud, but it may just be me. bequeath to me... bequeath me, for me the "to" was not needed, but again, it may just be me. The title is short, but I like the way it starts this full cup of a short write... yes, it's good to read you sir. Thanks for posting. Richard

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