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jetz
jetz
Jun 09, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hell

       Hell

  No moon
  No stars in sight
  The sky is invisible
  In this absence of light

  No noise
  Nothing moves 
  The world has come to a stop
  As if waiting for its cue

  No touch
  All alone
  Suspended animation
  This place that I call home

  Can you see what isn't there
  Do you feel what I can't touch
  If this place is really hell
  Why do I visit it so much

— jetz, Jun 09, 2010

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Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

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jetz

jetz

16 years ago

Sometimes that’s much

Sometimes that's much easier said then done, my friend. Thank you Dale for taking the time. much appreciated. Sue
jetz

jetz

16 years ago

Thanks Dan, There was no

Thanks Dan, There was no need for you to PM your correction.(my correction?) This is a workshop. I appreciate your taking the time. and as for your last comment, cloudy here , with rain expected. Sue
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wolf

16 years ago

Still as excellent as the

Still as excellent as the rest, really beautiful, I'm very glad I found your poems, I like people that inspire me.
jetz

jetz

16 years ago

Hi Wolf, I am humbled by

Hi Wolf, I am humbled by your response. I don't believe I have ever been told I was an inspiration...I will try not to let that go to my head. SMILE! Thank you again. Sue
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

Dear Jetz

perfect poetry, i loved every word and you really made it work the title is brilliant, and for a minute i was in hell! Beatiful..... i too am so glad i came to read...... shirley harrison
jetz

jetz

16 years ago

I must say Shirley, I was a

I must say Shirley, I was a tad surprised to see a response from you. That being said, I thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to pass them on. Sue
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

excellent write sue

'Can you see what isn’t there Do you feel what I can’t touch' the whole poem had me kind of on edge well done love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
jetz

jetz

16 years ago

Hi Judy, On edge…kind of

Hi Judy, On edge...kind of what I imagine hell must be like, huh? I think writers write some of their best work, when they are in 'hell.' Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to respond. Greatly appreciated. Sue
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hippiepoet69

15 years 12 months ago

Good write

I've been there. My home now is only Hell because it is located 706 miles from heaven. Take Care. huey

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