a cloud

==

if I thought it'd
do any good at all, I'd
ring up

those pharma
folks, ask them please
to bring back my sister

-

a
cloud

of
outlandish size,
substance, complexity scuds
west to east high
above

across
a pluperfect,
sunbaked sky, her faulted brakes
pushed to max; but ---
but

the
wind, the damned wind,
comes on too strong for her;

-

madness,
after all, had
been one prescription drug
away;

-

down
here, where I stand
motionless, looking up, Time
clicked to Pause for
a

too
long moment, looking
up gawping? breezeless!

-

all
it takes is
Chantix; just ask my sister;
she knows

==

— barbsdad2003, Jun 12, 2010

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Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Chuck

made me feel sad ... I am speechless I will come back in the morning and try and offer a decent comment love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

barbsdad2003

15 years 12 months ago

Thanx ...

for reading, commenting. Much appreciated. Chuck

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

Chuck what struck me so much

Chuck what struck me so much with this write was the depth you write of mental illness ... I have schizophrenia and it was a long battle for me to wellness your poem struck me to the bone ... I had help coming back I had lots of help and love from a good man that was the only thing that helped and the love of my children sorry for my lack of decent commentary I was very affected by your poem love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

barbsdad2003

15 years 12 months ago

Thanx so ...

much for seeing what is here to be seen. It would seem your experience has left you open to understanding. My sister's prognosis is all over the board. She could improve somewhat, not at all, or somewhere south of completely. And only the awfully stressing toll of time will tell/reveal. Thanx again, Chuck

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Chuck

I had a hard road to recovery my illness was triggered by a head injury and it took years of juggling different drugs till they found a mixture that kept me stable ive been well now a long time and its a constant battle and I ahve to be vigilant I wish your sister wellness I know how she feels ... my experience left me scarred but a better person in the end I think I had to fall hard to find myself, in a way, if that makes sense hugs I am glad I could express what I feel sometimes your poetry stuns me and I am speechless its just a mark of good poetry and kudos to you smile just glad for a change I could explain my recitence in expressing myself love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

barbsdad2003

15 years 12 months ago

Thanx

I hear you loud ... and clear. Hugs, Chuck

Mark

15 years 12 months ago

she quit?

Good for her! Got pretty bad beforehand I take it.. A bit difficult for me to read through all the twists and turns. A challenge.. Mark Resilient Flexibility RUN; when there seems to be no answer common sense will not speak, so run - -go running..

barbsdad2003

15 years 12 months ago

She quit ...

the Chantix, but not before it almost killed her. As to smoking? No, she has not quit. Thanx, Chuck

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