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Jun 12, 2010
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Willows
You faced me with a smile,
Healthy and strong;
The picture I'd paint,
If I were an artist,
And not a grim scribbler;
You wanted a promise;
I remember the pressure of it
Storming my shore, and dying
Against my wall;
No Achilles to save the day;
The rainy afternoons we spent
Tearing each other apart;
The nights we sculpted perfection;
And the mornings, when love actually came,
Like dusty sunlight on an antique frame~
Healthy and strong;
The picture I'd paint,
If I were an artist,
And not a grim scribbler;
You wanted a promise;
I remember the pressure of it
Storming my shore, and dying
Against my wall;
No Achilles to save the day;
The rainy afternoons we spent
Tearing each other apart;
The nights we sculpted perfection;
And the mornings, when love actually came,
Like dusty sunlight on an antique frame~
— Chris B, Jun 12, 2010
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Critiques
raj
16 years ago
Nicely sculpted
raskin
16 years ago
I agree great line,
mona
16 years ago
great
judyanne
16 years ago
lovely write chris
adjei agyei-baah
16 years ago
A beautiful love piece to
shirley harrison
16 years ago
Wow
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Chris B
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