those - oh - oil

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those -
oh -
oil

-

those

not innocent seem
unable to recognize
innocence so plain

-

oh

how sweetly chorus
nameless birds who break this day
fan on hums hardware

-

oil

whelms over vast gulf
destroys life marsh marine those
folks feeding off them

==

— barbsdad2003, Jun 19, 2010

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Critiques

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Thanks Chuck. http://www.stuff.co.nz/world/americas/3720632/BP-accused-of-cover-up-over-oil-spill Some good articles. http://www.democracynow.org/tags/bp_oil_spill The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort, but where he stands at times of challenge and controversy. ~ Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr.

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

duh!?

Ya'll keep throwing all these forms unknown to me out,my fat head will explode!!lol .What is this form called?.........scribbler(no stars due to lack of reference on my behalf)

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

These

are three haikus (en.wikipedia.org/wiki/haiku), Scribbler. "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

Marie-I-Be

15 years 11 months ago

How many haiku?

In case you would like to know for the future: The plural of haiku is haiku. Given the irony in the first piece in particular, I know I would label that one a senryu.

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

I wasn't sure

if there was an "s" at the end of haiku not and I could not find a definite answer. How do you distinguish haiku from senryu? It is simply a matter of haiku= nature and senryu= people? I was under the impression that a senryu needed to be cynical or dark humor and since Chuck put it in with two haiku, I figured his aim was to write three haiku or haiku-like poems. But you say it is ironic which would be in the same ball park as cynicism and dark humor. I see what you mean now. I don't get a strong impression of irony from "Those", but there is only so much that can be conveyed in seventeen sound units. Thank you for this information, I hope it is helpful to scribbler because it has been helpful to me. Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe

Marie-I-Be

15 years 11 months ago

senryu, etc.

A senryu is structurally similar to haiku but focuses on irony or satire in human nature. Whether or not there is a vein of such irony would have to be open to individual perspective. A haiku relates to nature but is usually defined more specifically as referring to things seasonal. That is quite restricting, leading to writers taking liberties to toy with other subjects and to apply the haiku term generically---and I'm all for exercising that freedom (haiku purists would probably object). So I think the distinctions are sometimes blurry. At least the line and syllable structures to follow are more clear, such as the 5-7-5 for haiku/senryu and the 5-7-5-7-7 for tanka. In any case, the challenge is to convey significance in so few words.

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

oh

threw me off as I interepted as one poem.thanks

Marie-I-Be

15 years 11 months ago

more good work

These are excellent, Chuck. I always appreciate the sensitivity and insightfulness revealed in your writings.

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