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When Will These Love Pains Go Away
Strip me of my barriers
This walls name is insecure
And that one, oh he’s just Toli boy
But the two over there, their job is to block hope and joy
Strip me of these stiff brick bars
Which keep me in, and make me hard
I hold my precious heart so near
Well you see it’s fragile, so naturally I take extra care my dear
Strip me of these clothes tonight
For the full moon excuses our sins in it’s sinful light
And I ache for you, as you do I
That much you can not deny
Strip me of any inhibitions
I want to be completely naked with you
Alone, stripped down in a naked room
With nothing between us, but the light of the moon
There’s nothing left for me to hide
You have seen me at my worst, no need for pride
I have embarrassed myself, and felt it’s shame
Yet still you gaze upon me with an admiring gaze
A gaze which by the way
I still melt under to this very day.
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Roscoe Lane
15 years 11 months ago
What would,
magics02
15 years 11 months ago
hey gal
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