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Silent_Rain
Jun 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I want the Chaos

I don’t want life to be easy
I want the chaos
and the rain
I want the insanity
even if it brings pain

I don’t want to feel numb
I want to feel the passion
the heat
the crazy out of your mind feeling
you get when your in love

I don’t want to play on the safe side
just so I wont get hurt
I want to be wild
mischievous
out of control and free

I don’t want the sun to always shine
I want to feel the winds
that come with the storm
because you can’t have a rainbow
without a little rain

I don’t want perfection
I want to make mistakes
and be proved wrong
I want to be who I am
not who you want me to be

 

— Silent_Rain, Jun 26, 2010
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themoonman

themoonman

15 years 11 months ago

Silent Rain...

The title is a great draw for someone like me, of course, I rarely take a direct line from a poem anymore for a title, but... this one works for me. I did feel you could tighten it up a bit. The first stanza is very good, but I'd shorten up the last line, but that doesn't mean you should... it works as it is, but... out loud it feels long (to me). Great theme... thanks for posting. Richard
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful write rain

just love 'because you can’t have a rainbow without a little rain' btw line 10 (your) - (you're) ? can't agree with richard about the last line (unless you've changed it) it read well to me. love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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broken_skye

15 years 11 months ago

Good.

That is very good. But look over again. There are a few mistakes.

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