My Friend Flicker

A spark igites
and the rest is history.

That lone, single spark
is responsible for it, all!

The laughter, tears, and anger,
depression, giddiness, and regret;

all were each but, a single live-wire.
Once lit, ther is no turning back!

However, it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass

where the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should be holding the flame!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: ....and here's yet another, avenue.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Comments

docmaverick

12 years 11 months ago

Thanx, Mark....

...good to hear from you.
doc.

judyanne

12 years 11 months ago

love the title

'were the fire shall burn' - do you mean 'where' doc?

just in my opinion - i think this would work better in quatrains - thoughts seem a little scattered with the couplets....

and
'were each but, a single live-wire' - (again imho) would work better with 'are' instead of 'were'

i really like the concept here doc
'it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass
.... were the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should hold the flame'
- has me thinking

love judy
xxx

Ian.T

12 years 11 months ago

Doc

A moment held in the Now but of yesterday and tomorrow, great write there Doc,
Yours Ian.T