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Aug 01, 2012
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My Friend Flicker
A spark igites
and the rest is history.
That lone, single spark
is responsible for it, all!
The laughter, tears, and anger,
depression, giddiness, and regret;
all were each but, a single live-wire.
Once lit, ther is no turning back!
However, it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass
where the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should be holding the flame!
— docmaverick, Aug 01, 2012
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: ....and here's yet another, avenue.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Draft
Critiques
judyanne
13 years 10 months ago
love the title
'were the fire shall burn' - do you mean 'where' doc?
just in my opinion - i think this would work better in quatrains - thoughts seem a little scattered with the couplets....
and
'were each but, a single live-wire' - (again imho) would work better with 'are' instead of 'were'
i really like the concept here doc
'it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass
.... were the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should hold the flame'
- has me thinking
love judy
xxx
Ian.T
13 years 10 months ago
Doc
A moment held in the Now but of yesterday and tomorrow, great write there Doc,
Yours Ian.T
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