scribbler

Mar 12, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

AT 1:00 AM

Late at night
alone.
No company but thoughts
and memories.

Which lead to doubts
in old men.
Could I have done better?
Can I do better?

It is during these times
that the long knives
slowly peel our souls
and test the metttle
of our beliefs.

Do you ever wonder,
as I did in my youth,
why old men never seem
to sleep?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My semi-weakly free verse

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

Barbara Writes

13 years 4 months ago

Stan

All around good poetry
i feel the title has that late night feel when thoughts make you reminense about times past.

With that said your poem resonated two different times
The time 1:am and the times you were remembering in your poem

scribbler

13 years 4 months ago

Hi Barb

I am pleased you liked this free verse excursion........stan

Barbara Writes

13 years 4 months ago

yes i do

It is a really take me back poem

China Blue

13 years 4 months ago

Stan

sleep

I have to say this is a poem to ponder and no rhyme wow
well done all the same I'm sure many have wondered at much, during that time when sleep will not come
I really liked the wording of stanza#3
It is during these times
that the long knives
slowly peel our souls
and test the metttle
of our beliefs
very descriptive

scribbler

13 years 4 months ago

Hi Chrys

I do a free verse on occasion just to flex lol. I'm pleased you like this effort..........stan

wesley snow

13 years 4 months ago

OOOH.

This is a real good example of "subject led" poetry. You could written this as prose, a song lyric, hell a limerick and it would have had the same effect. This is very special. wesley

scribbler

13 years 4 months ago

Hey Wes

There have been a few time when I've posted a poem in free verse, rhyming and Haiku but I've decided that even though it was 1 post it violated 1 per day rule so I stopped doing it. Hmmmmm............might try this as rhyme after my shop closes............stan PS "subject led poetry" learn something new every day lol