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How long have I known you
I feel you in my bones,
always right behind me
I know it, I just can't see
You,
and you are so wonderful and loving
soft kisses on worn out skin
I look,into your eyes
as pure as freshly planted rye
you really love me,
don't you?
In every touch,
am I too much?
not enough?
you alway smile, reassuring
oh, and how
curing it is
your love is felt
My only wish is to melt into
You
what, I wonder, have I ever done to deserve this?
a lottery must have been won
I probably cheated, if that's the case
I haven't the right to see your face

I love you.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: amurica

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 5 months ago

The deep emotions that you

The deep emotions that you are capable of show here. I have no suggestions of how you can make this better. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

I agree with Geezer

One small thing

“a lottery must of been won”

Should be

“a lottery must have been won”

Or

“a lottery must’ve been won” if you want to keep it phonetically the same.

Otherwise really superb,
Tim

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

hello,

I think this is a lovely affirmation of the love you feel!

*hugs, Cat