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Jan 10, 2015
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ABOUT CLOCKS
ABOUT CLOCKS
Tick tock
time marks the clock
each hour lives
and then it dies
the days slide
one into the other,
waiting for the shoe to drop
cannot stop
what is to be,
watch T.V. to stay away
from me.
violence . insanity
no hope for mankind.
Lonely in my own fear
the minutes hard to bear
terror strikes suddenly
can't shut off the mind
whirling out of control
memories that remind.
Mortality,
Family and friends
ten little Indians
and then just one
soon there will be none.
No more to say.
get through the day
much the same way
waiting for the shoe to drop
tick-tock
goes the clock.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
10 years 6 months ago
beautifully crafted, impacting
and intelligent. You just get better and better.
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
Sometimes I hit the mark,,,,,
Sometimes I hit the mark,,,,,, Thanks, Jess.
best.
joe
Ian.T
10 years 6 months ago
Joe
A great write and there is no time it is only a tick tock that man made to enslave our minds.
One day you will know that there is no time when all things can come to you all at one moment,
Lovely work, Yours Ian
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
Hope you are right, Ian. joe
Hope you are right, Ian.
joe
Esker
10 years 6 months ago
I agree with the others here..
Great poem!
and then I remembered
my friends parents had
antiques
Those required winding
a great spring that hauled
up the weight upon which
the ratcheting leverage
let loose the workings of
the clock..Grandfather
in this case...others it
is a sealed coiled spring
in the evening the procedure
after dinner and dish
washing...
But your poem brought that
memory back
no worry about power loss
and blinking led faces...
Thank You!
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
Proust: involuntary memory
Proust: involuntary memory
alidzain
10 years 6 months ago
Geremia
Agree with the rest. You are getting good, sir.
Alid
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
As I say. I do hit the mark from time to time.
As I say. I do hit the mark from time to time,
thank you, my fiend.
joe
lovedly
10 years 6 months ago
then just one ....soon there will be none.
sad they are saying
you are getting good from best
I am apart from the rest
joe your the
GOODEST!
and tis no jest...
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
YOU are the best, my friend
YOU are the best, my friend
joe
mand
10 years 6 months ago
You did
You hit the mark with this one Joe - your poems always give me food for thought.
Great poem!
Love Mand xxxx
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
Thank you, Mand, Your
Thank you, Mand, Your comment means a lot to me.
joe
scribbler
10 years 6 months ago
Hey Joe
The tracking of time is one of the things which separates us from animals. They pay no heed of it and this frees them from worrying about the future and obsessing over the past. Who is to say we really are better than them in this respect? For us all the clock tics........great poem Joe.......stan
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
You are right, Stan, I
You are right, Stan, I rather be ignorant of the years passing me by. Time is the enemy,
""Knowledge is pain"" [Sophocles]
joe
Ian.T
10 years 6 months ago
Stan
We could set our clocks by the flight of the Rooks each day as they came to the field behind our house when I was a children.
Not sure how they did it but they didn't wear watches???
Have a great day out there, Yours Ian
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
That is why I hate coocoo
That is why I hate coocoo clocks
:)
Esker
10 years 6 months ago
One line wit...
like flashbulbs retrieving memory
Proust..
will have to look this person up
again..
there is some memory of it
Thank You!
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
See internet; His whole work
See internet; His whole work dealt with time lost and regained.
Esker
10 years 6 months ago
Cyclic subjectivity!
Aha more peices of the puzzle..
I have the fascination with the moebius strip thing
so this will work its way in my thinking ...
Loops...
We had fun as twenty somethings
digging through the old recorders
my freinds father and mom had..
We set them aside and ran a tape loop
recording funny dialoge and sound effects
about a three second delay depending
on how far apart the recording heads
were..on return the one machine would
play the secondary machine woulr
record...reel to reels both table top models
vintage then
its popular now in creative music..
PJ Harvey and others use that shadow
effect as I call it..
you could get about fifteen layers before
it become lost the initial track.
some interesting affects
I was the one who put that together..they
had all the toys...
and dialogue ideas..
teamwork of creative minds..
We built an electric guitar from a car speaker
wired to a amplifier tape deck plug in microphone
turned on mass loud....you could hit the accoustic
and it would sound like Neil Young's overfed
chords!!
duct tape held the speaker in place..
I know...thats now what you do with beautiful
equipment...
but the results everyone remembers
funny creative venues...
like the Beatles "Number 9, Number 9...Number 9"
Thank You!