Neopoem Of The Week February 12th to February 18th 2023

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Absolution

Forgiveness is near
If we open our hearts now
Without questioning

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Comments

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Yes

A simple yet, meaningful write. Forgiveness is difficult but there if we are open to it. Well done!

Clentin

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you for.your comments.

Thank you for.your comments. I was trying to write a Haiku using the 5 7 5 syllables
New at this trying different forms.

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

done well. I am new at writing different forms as well! This is what makes this site so great is that it is a learning workshop. We all learn from each other and give each other encouragement to try different things.

Lavender

2 years 4 months ago

Absolution

Hello, Clentin,
What a beautiful message! The definition of unconditional love. I've been trying to explore the haiku realm, too, and it is more challenging than it looks! I believe this would actually be considered a senryu, which is a bit different than haiku in that it deals with human elements and emotions, whereas haiku's subject is about nature - seasons, earthly elements. You have written an inspiring piece - much to love in a brief form.
Thank you!
L

Clentin

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you. I am trying to

Thank you. I am trying to explore the different types of poems.
I am not familiar with sendup?

I thought a haiku was any topic that used the 5,7,5 syllable
Form?

Clentin

2 years 4 months ago

Senru! Sorry

Senru!
Sorry

Lavender

2 years 4 months ago

Hi, Clentin,

There are so many wonderful, challenging, and fun poetry forms out there! You may want to look up the differences between haiku, senryu, and another called tanka - all Japanese poetry forms. I normally write free verse, so when I try a structured form, I try very hard to follow guidelines and rules to meet the challenge. There is history and culture in most forms that give us insight into the minds of poets. I could study it all day...
Again, your poem is wonderful in structure, feeling, and message! A gift to read!
L

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

L

Thank you for explaining the difference in the types of Japanese poetry. I never realized that haiku focused on nature and senryu was for human emotions. More reasons I love this site! We learn from each other.

Lavender

2 years 4 months ago

Hi, Carrie,

I can relay only what I've learned so far, which is just a drop in the sea of poetry. There are layers after layers to haiku / senryu. Clentin's poem is intriguing and very thought provoking not only in its strong message, but haiku / senryu form!
L