Abundance

Giraffe.
Tower walking.
Exquisite designs intertwine.
Finds tenderness behind the thorns.
Grace.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Another quintain experiment...

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Canada, BC

Comments

Geezer

3 years 10 months ago

This is...

very good! I like the visions that accompany your lines and as I know some little bit about giraffes; I know that they use their long tongues to get at a favored, tender fruit hidden by thorns. The Tower walking is an obvious reference to their height and the exquisite designs pointing to their beauty! Surely no one can watch a giraffe walk or run without commenting on its' grace! Very well done! ~ Geez.
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Owl Has My Soul

3 years 9 months ago

Thanks Geez -- Giraffe is the

Thanks Geez -- Giraffe is the favourite animal of one of my sons. We fed them on a trip to the Phoenix Zoo one time. Total thrill

Owl Has My Soul

3 years 9 months ago

Oh and "intertwine"

Oh and "intertwine" references how they cross and rub necks to show affection to each other.

Geezer

3 years 9 months ago

Yes...

I did miss referencing that. ~ Geez.
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