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lou
lou
This poem is part of the workshop:

Writing With Emotions

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Acrid Mist writing with emotion workshop

You have what I want
Tiny bites nip at my
Self control.

I need what you have
An ache cramps
My back.

Give it to me
Got have it,
It’s not yours.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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raj

14 years ago

Lou

this poem can be perceived as one expressing "desire" but that is not listed in the workshop on emotions is it?...may be i perceived it in correctly....but i liked the mysterious factor in this...

lou

lou

14 years ago

Raj

Thank you I'll wait for some more input, before I change anything

Lou

R

raj

14 years ago

Lou

please don't get me wrong..i didn't mean to suggest that you need to change anything...

lou

lou

14 years ago

Raj

don't worry i'm not offended. The idea is to change things .

Lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

Hehe

I'm always missing stuff out..
Lou

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Dear Lou,

I'm impressed! You have expressed a couple of emotions with so few words!

always, Cat