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After the wife made a suggestion about what to write about...
I decided to title my piece
a concatenation of a few different notions
incorporating fictional romance
alluding to myself and spouse
in conjunction with hybridization
stemming from vague references
to tried and true value
tangentially sparring with Cinderella
but giving the following
free verse poem a slight twist and shout.
I take the liberty to contrive
a fictional tale of make believe
where faux royalty
née monarchical rule
encompassed great swaths of land
long before Lower Merion
coalesced into an enclave
and concentration of wealthy MainLiners,
which kingdom or fiefdom of Europeans
more or less duplicated
the type of government
from the so called old country
allocating the then sparse population
into a hierarchy or pecking order
where arranged marriages
sealed the fate of those
most aggressive to dominate
those people rather submissive and meek,
whose role became passive and subservient
to the dominant and overbearing
dons trumpeting might is right.
The princess of Penn Valley
and the pauper of Collegeville
unbeknownst to each other,
(though they lived approximately
twenty miles from each other,
each existed hundreds of years apart),
nevertheless they would meet and marry
five months later predicated on pastiche
tenuously linkedin to
the Victorian era and the Modernist period
a daughter born to first time mother.
Iniquities heaped
upon head of Penn Valley princess...,
whose brutish, nasty
and short twisted sisters
relentlessly tormented their sibling
then out of desperation,
she wed Peter Peter pumpkin eater,
who kept her in a pumpkin shell.
Just by chance I happened
to hear the quiet lament
a damsel in distress
surreptitiously signaled knight
whose newborn baby
suckling at the ample bosom
one shining armor,
yours truly himself donned role
though hashtagged as pawn,
he convinced said lass
to accept unconditionally
unbridled love his hands
grasping those soft fingers
of a young mother with innocence,
yet full of wisdom
beyond scant seventeen years a
slave in the role
of scullery maid damned courtesy
when one generation
prior to another
one poor lass barely out
of childhood when a series
of unfortunate events -
found lass gravid
with child automatically denying
only scant opportunities
for escaping mean vicious
cycle, thus unbeknownst
to chivalrous brave heart
fictionalized as the writer
of these words me, whose
overzealous overactive imagination
expounded one being born
hundreds of years ago,
when bulk of folks agrarian
at a time when many
if not most civilizations and
their discontents
could never have foreseen
nor believe as an eye witness
time traveler reported
videre licet onset of The now
Fifth Industrial Revolution
(5IR), also known as
Industry 5.0 represents
a new phase of industrialization
characterized by the harmonious collaboration
between humans
and advanced technologies,
particularly AI and robotics.
It builds upon the
Fourth Industrial Revolution (Industry 4.0),
focusing on a more human-centric approach,
increased resilience, and a stronger emphasis
on sustainability.
This shift emphasizes
the importance of human creativity and skills
alongside machine capabilities, aiming
for greater societal well-being.
Key aspects of the Fifth Industrial Revolution:
Human-Machine Collaboration:
The core concept is the integration
of human intelligence and skills
with the speed, productivity,
and consistency of machines.
Sustainability:
5IR prioritizes environmental
and societal impact, moving
beyond purely economic value
to encompass broader concepts
like human well-being.
Cognitive Intelligence:
The rise of advanced AI,
particularly technologies like GPT models,
is a driving force in this revolution,
leading to the creation of cognitive partners
that can augment human capabilities.
Focus on Human-Centeredness:
5IR aims to create a more
human-centric approach to technology,
ensuring that it serves the needs
of people and society,
rather than the other way around.
Increased Resilience:
The ability of systems to adapt
and recover from disruptions
is a key aspect of 5IR,
particularly in areas
like supply chains and manufacturing.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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3 weeks 6 days ago
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kowque
3 weeks 6 days ago
I had to pull out the dictionary
Twas worth it to understand this piece.
Loved it.