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Dec 18, 2022
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Alchemy
Writing the words that bleed on this page
Dispersing the anger and sadness and rage
Come now what may, this story be told
May all my musings be thoughtful and bold
If inspiration escapes me I’m lost
Stuck at the toll booth and can’t pay the cost
Reach back to stories both common and old
Teach me to transmute this lead into gold.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Candlewitch
2 years 6 months ago
hello Tim,
it is great to see you this morning! I feel, the best lines of this poem are:
Reach back to stories both common and old
Teach me to transmute this lead into gold.
Great title and flow. mr. wizard!
*hugs, Cat
Lavender
2 years 6 months ago
Alchemy
Good morning, Tim,
This is very much like watching lead turn into gold. Wonderful title and theme throughout. A bit of magic here!
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Geezer
2 years 6 months ago
I get where...
you are coming from. Sometimes, we have to go search out a story that makes our muse happy. Then, she/he will fill in the blanks and voila, a new piece of work! I don't mind helping out once in a while, I mean after-all, she must get a bit weary, flying all over the place, looking for good stuff! I think that you have plenty of material to work with, seeing as you have wife, kids and a dog to put so much love and funny stuff in your life. This is a good example of the skill you have. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
I can almost hear
a song in this! Sometimes our muse(s) are stubborn and don't give us much to work with but I think you always have something to contribute and surely enjoy reading your poems. Great job!