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Geezer
Geezer
Oct 10, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

All Alone...

Upon a barren shore he sits
Longing to be free
From there he sees little bits
Transparent to you and me

A lonely howl of frustration
Is all he has to give
Why, in all of "tarnation"
Won't they let him live?

Time and space mean everything
Never get close enough
Not as close as spaghetti-string
Goshdog, It sure is rough!

There is a land, a paradise of love
He smells it, and howls long notes
If there are Goshdogs up above
He'd have her silken little coat

Alas, it's not to be, my friend
The distance is too great
This last scent will be the end
Then it will be too late....

About This Poem

Last Few Words: The large Shepard-dog next door, has been howling for the last couple if days. I found that the female dog on the next block over was in heat.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

lou

lou

13 years 9 months ago

Gee

Considering it is inspired by a horny dog, this is a very wistful poem and even romantic.

I'm not sure about the first stanza, the little bits bother me, maybe you could say ' looking out to sea, he grieves for what he needs'.

Apart from that I enjoyed it.

Lou

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 9 months ago

If I change...

"the little bits", it will not rhyme with the counterpoint, and it will change what it means. He is surrounded by fences on three sides, and I see him looking through the cracks in the fence. He only sees a little "bit" of the world, we see it all the time, and we see more and notice it little. [Thus, the transparency. ~ Gee

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

Thank you...

No, it was indeed composed with the thought of the dog next door. The poor thing gets tpo see very little of the world that we take for granted. ~ Geezer

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

What...

disturbs you about this one? Is it the fact that he never gets any satisfaction?
~ Gee

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

It's such...

a shame, that nobody ever thinks of letting those Ninja Turtles get a little!. LOL

S

scribbler

13 years 7 months ago

Hi Gee

Amazing where inspiration can come from isn't it? lol...............stan

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

Yes...

it is. We had a good brainstorm last night at Lou's workshop chat. We came up with lots of ideas, just feeding from one and another. I've written a poem about a plastic bag floating in the road, and other things that some of my friends have said were off the wall,but entertaining. LOL ~ Gee

K

Kailashana2

13 years 7 months ago

Inspiration, now there's a

Inspiration, now there's a thought to be inspired about. Reading your poem, Gee, and the ensuing explanation and dialogue, I too felt this was a poem that was *unsettling*, why? Because we've all felt land-locked at times (whether horny or not).

You may not have noticed it, but you took a real-life incident and made it universal. THIS is what poetry is about.

~A

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

I try...

to take most of my work from real life, and make it so that others can relate to it. I have a wierd mind at times, [or so my friends tell me.] This is a backyard dog, one that never gets to go in the house, and rarely gets to go anywhere for that matter. They do take him to camp with them for the summer, but the rest of the time he is in that little yard chained to his dog-house. Sad. Thanks for the read and comment, ~ Gee