All That is Golden

stars in my eyes
they shine
and the scent in the air
is fine
flowers as thoughts,
form into words ,
as a synchronized frequency in tune
with the music made by the moon

secrets and marvel
unfold
all that is golden
is sold
But love remains.

About This Poem

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Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Berlin, Germany, DEU

Favorite Poets: Wordsworth, Keats, Byron, Blake, Burroughs, Kerouac, Indie Adams, Prophet, Chameleon, Jack Heslop, Tagore

Comments

Nordic cloud

13 years 3 months ago

This is charming, it needs

This is charming, it needs some work on it, but the skeleton leaf of it is cast, now lets see...

I don't know why but the scent of the air is fine, specially the last two words seem not in keeping with the slight mystery your poem gives us. It sort of sits down there for a rest.

frequency sings in tune? with the music made by the ....something....moon?

Secrets...there's an s here so MarvelS should follow suit?

I was just doing this and that as it has something special in spite of its simplicity.
Keep writing, L.Nordic cloud.

Cloudthings

13 years 3 months ago

Brilliant... a little

Brilliant... a little treasure this one, I wouldn't change anything about it, it run & flows so well & lands in the right places in every way in my opinion.

Love it!

Cloud (the other one!)

Cloudthings

13 years 3 months ago

I have now read Anns comment, no oposition intended, I can see her comments are worthy... just I usually comment before I read any other comments so mine are strictly uncloloured by any other issue or perspective... Hello cloud-sister!.... I sttill love it just as it is, merely my opinion.
xx
A

MDT

13 years 3 months ago

thanks

hi, thank you for appreciating my poem :)

Nordic cloud

13 years 3 months ago

Not in the least perturbed by

Not in the least perturbed by your comment dear Anni, I just wrote what I felt then, its only an opinion. And bother it, now I cannot see the poem in this box of reply, so will stop here with a smile. Annushka.

Back now to agree with you, this is like a little innocent flower in a great wide landscape, lovely. MDT

MDT

13 years 3 months ago

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thanks nordic :)