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All Hands To The Pump (Cliche Workshop)
All Hands To The Pump
You keep me on the down low
Telling me that it's all good
And all is fair in love and war
But it ain't nothing but a chicken wing
Because too many cooks spoil the broth
Of your nasty little acid test
Your love is blind to my needs
And your rolling stone gathers no moss
You're free as a bird as you roam
Like a seven year itch
Taking only the icing on the cake
You think that love is as scarce as hen's teeth
But you're hot to trot a mile a minute
Saying "I'm game"
You don't know that silence is golden
Because you're rotten to the core
You think I'm a necessary evil
As the lesser of two evils
When you could keep your nose to the grindstone
And hit that ball and knock it out of the park
Knock the cover off the ball
With you it is age before beauty
You Can't see that my love is
Fresh as a Summer's rain
And deeper than the deepest ocean
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This poem is for the cliches workshop.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Kailashana2
14 years ago
A mutual admiration society
A mutual admiration society forms.
~A
(Double check your caps.)
p.s. These workshops are SO MUCH FUN and gives us another chance to revisit one another, regardless of our original and/or changing impressions.
;-)
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Anna,
Thanks for that, I also misspelled a word! LOL.
always, Cat
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Thanks!
I know what you mean... it is cringe-worthy! LOL!
always, Cat
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Bloody Hell
Cat,
Like Anna & Lou you made it look easy...I am most impressed. This has been a good exercise...and I doubt any of us will dare use a cliche again.
HS
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dear Dan,
Thanks! I choked on my own words, LOL!
always. Cat
lou
14 years ago
Cat
Great stuff you make cliches seem cool.
Lou
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Thanks, Lou!
You won't find this poem in any book! LOL!
always, Cat
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
Cat
cliches used really wel
Candlewitch
14 years ago
:)
Thanks, Barbara!
always, Cat
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dear (((Ian)))
You are so good at them. I think you must have a book of cliches on hand! Or else you could write one yourself!
always, Cat
Race_9togo
14 years ago
Cat
Of all I have read, you'rs comes closest to being actually readable without that cringing "oh no you didn't" feeling.
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dear Jim,
Thanks for the encouragement! It's hard to write a poem that bad, LOL!
always, Cat
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
damn girl this is truly good!
damn girl this is truly good!
Candlewitch
14 years ago
LOL!
A really good bad poem? Is there such a thing or is it an oxymoron? LOL!
always, Cat
Barbara Writes
14 years ago
really good
the best i read so far as the flow is well done
and easy to read
Candlewitch
14 years ago
!!!
Thanks so much, dear Barbara!
always, Cat
Eduardo Cruz
14 years ago
Ian
big mouth Rat, let us brown nose if it's what we do best.
Your statement shows that inreality you're the champ of brown noseing. Damn you do it good. Hahaha!
Eddie
raj
14 years ago
Dearest Cat
from start to finish it is absolutely spot on as is expected of a pro...while i sit and absorb this learning experience....
much love..
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dear Raj,
You are far too kind.
love, Cat
raj
14 years ago
Dear Cat
I am now eager to read your re-write...
much love...
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dearest Ian,
You are too much, LOL! You have made this workshop a lot of fun.
love, Cat
Candlewitch
13 years 12 months ago
Thanks!
To everyone who read this and responded! Sorry I had to be gone for a bit due to an injury. I sprained my right wrist and was put into a brace. I'm right handed and trying to type with my left was a mess. So I adopted the hunt and peck method for a while,which got very tiresome and sore. I finally just stopped trying and nursed my wrist. I am back now, taking a break from the brace. I still won't be as active in neo poet as I had been. They say time wounds all heels...
always, Cat