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Olympic Pool (initial workshop)

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All Hands To The Pump (Cliche Workshop)

All Hands To The Pump

You keep me on the down low
Telling me that it's all good
And all is fair in love and war
But it ain't nothing but a chicken wing
Because too many cooks spoil the broth
Of your nasty little acid test
Your love is blind to my needs
And your rolling stone gathers no moss
You're free as a bird as you roam
Like a seven year itch
Taking only the icing on the cake
You think that love is as scarce as hen's teeth
But you're hot to trot a mile a minute
Saying "I'm game"
You don't know that silence is golden
Because you're rotten to the core
You think I'm a necessary evil
As the lesser of two evils
When you could keep your nose to the grindstone
And hit that ball and knock it out of the park
Knock the cover off the ball
With you it is age before beauty
You Can't see that my love is
Fresh as a Summer's rain
And deeper than the deepest ocean

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem is for the cliches workshop.

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Kailashana2

14 years ago

A mutual admiration society

A mutual admiration society forms.

~A

(Double check your caps.)

p.s. These workshops are SO MUCH FUN and gives us another chance to revisit one another, regardless of our original and/or changing impressions.

;-)

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Anna,

Thanks for that, I also misspelled a word! LOL.

always, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Thanks!

I know what you mean... it is cringe-worthy! LOL!

always, Cat

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Bloody Hell

Cat,

Like Anna & Lou you made it look easy...I am most impressed. This has been a good exercise...and I doubt any of us will dare use a cliche again.

HS

lou

lou

14 years ago

Cat

Great stuff you make cliches seem cool.

Lou

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Dear (((Ian)))

You are so good at them. I think you must have a book of cliches on hand! Or else you could write one yourself!

always, Cat

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years ago

Cat

Of all I have read, you'rs comes closest to being actually readable without that cringing "oh no you didn't" feeling.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Dear Jim,

Thanks for the encouragement! It's hard to write a poem that bad, LOL!

always, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

LOL!

A really good bad poem? Is there such a thing or is it an oxymoron? LOL!

always, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years ago

!!!

Thanks so much, dear Barbara!

always, Cat

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

14 years ago

Ian

big mouth Rat, let us brown nose if it's what we do best.
Your statement shows that inreality you're the champ of brown noseing. Damn you do it good. Hahaha!

Eddie

R

raj

14 years ago

Dearest Cat

from start to finish it is absolutely spot on as is expected of a pro...while i sit and absorb this learning experience....

much love..

R

raj

14 years ago

Dear Cat

I am now eager to read your re-write...

much love...

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 12 months ago

Thanks!

To everyone who read this and responded! Sorry I had to be gone for a bit due to an injury. I sprained my right wrist and was put into a brace. I'm right handed and trying to type with my left was a mess. So I adopted the hunt and peck method for a while,which got very tiresome and sore. I finally just stopped trying and nursed my wrist. I am back now, taking a break from the brace. I still won't be as active in neo poet as I had been. They say time wounds all heels...

always, Cat