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Apr 25, 2012
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All Roads Would Lead to This
You’ve been dragging around my heart for years
And in my dirty, dirty mind, I should decide to let go
You’ve been hanging around in the chasm of my soul in fears
And in my light, some stories, I might decide to let you know
And what was it that you said? “All roads would lead to this”
Or something, so cerebral then, I wouldn’t notice
Tell me all the things that you’d never do
Come on, let me crush you up
Lovely, lovely, lovely
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
13 years 1 month ago
Washing Tears
I think that this needs a little organising into a poetic form, the words are there maybe they just need a little tweak, or probably a few more words on this theme.
Have a look at it for me and come back on what you think, Yours Ian.T