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... ALMOST ... NEWER STYLED POEMY... ELLIPSES
ALMOST.....
We all dance in the nude almost …
show all our assets ...most …
the drum beats mostly…
in synchronicity ….
we show ...everything....
…people watch us intently …
we dance …
in our bikinis ....…
then someone pranks...
...loosens the threads...
as we hold on to not…
these let go----------
them drop almost…
we enjoy dancing …
as men run along
we continue to dance ….
...then pair off to another land …
all of our own ...DIFFERENT KINDA SAND...…
each one with another
….we pair..we pair..we pair…
...all others stare ... stare.. and stare----
as music continues to play …
we close on and make belief …
... two each other dare to relieve….
we roll on in slumber ...
almost.............
no one cares....
almost
lol poemy.....
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 9 months ago
Parallel universes
I can’t remain in my universe when I read your poems. I have to place myself in a different space. I think everything you write has a omnipresent emotional feel attached to it. It’s playful yet sad but doesn’t take itself too seriously but it’s not fully a joke either though is it? Sorta how all Tim Burton films exist in his weird universe or Wes Anderson. Everything has this dreamlike haze shellacked over it. You’re such an interesting writer.
Tim
lovedly
2 years 9 months ago
You’re such an interesting writer...............................
Am in AWE of you
thanks
did you sing my song
ding dang
lol do so whenever you can...
oooo new NEOPOEMAN