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Nov 19, 2018
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Alone
Alone...
is a word that which I am
Loneliness is a disease
When I'm around people
I instantly become ill
People leave me
people hurt me
I've been hurt for the last time
alone is what I ever will be
alone is a word that I use quite often
lack of love
lack of honesty
lack of people to protect me
what makes me alone?
That is my name
I am Alone
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I am new at this so please tell me your honest opinion
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
themoonman
6 years 7 months ago
Hi,
Welcome to the site. You've chosen a subject
we are all acquainted with, some more than
others. I think you could pare it down, remove
at least a couple of "alone", it becomes redundant
or takes away from the weight of your burden to
repeat ... just a suggestion.
welcome again
Richard (themoonman)