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Alternative Medicine

I possess two Auntie Barbaras
on my maternal side;
each put Valium in their husbands’ flasks:
both subsequently died.

Uncle John a motorway accident,
Uncle Cliff a machine at work.
Not from malice or collusion,
just the usual married hurts

and anxieties of housewives
fobbed off with chemical relief,
whose protests end in tragedy.
Now united in their grief

the Barbaras live up on the hills,
far from where mishaps occur
and they beg that when I visit them
I bring ginseng and St John’s Wort.

My aunties sitting Buddha-style,
contemplative, disengaged;
reflective upon crystals,
each is thoroughly feng shuied.

A herbal remedy aroma,
the mantras hang like prayers;
around a table hot with incense
sit a seancing of chairs.

The gently clicking worry beads
and meditative breath
become climactic purrs of penance
as we approach the room of death.

Ascending Bardologically
through a softening of dark,
a door opens, on the other side
music trickles from a harp.

The edifice to John and Cliff
is made from empty Valium packs
supported by their ashes held
in two incriminating flasks.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: England

Favorite Poets: John Cooper Clarke , Fleur Adcock , Carol Anne Duffy , Derek Mahon

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Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

5 months 4 weeks ago

Hi Ray, I love this. What a

Hi Ray, I love this. What a brilliant story and told in a poem it made it all the more dramatic. I also think your play on words and near rhymes are fantastic. In particular this stood out for me;

reflective upon crystals,
each is thoroughly feng shuied.

Well done, Ruby xxx :)

R

Ray Miller

5 months 4 weeks ago

Alternative Medicine

Thanks, Ruby. I actually do have two aunts who surreptitiously gave Valium to their husbands. Neither died, though. Apparently, they did it so the husband could see what it was like.

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

5 months 4 weeks ago

Ha ha, naughty aunts? My

Ha ha, naughty aunts? My sister, god rest her soul, used to put sleeping tablets in her husbands tea at night. It didn't appear to do him any harm, it's not like we can ask him now and if she was here she'd deny it with a wry smile. Ruby xxx :)

Juarez5656

Juarez5656

5 months 4 weeks ago

A pretty monotonous poem

A pretty monotonous poem which just as easily could have been prose

In fact, it reads like the script of a Dateline episode broken up into stanzas.