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Anapestic Hexameter Quatrain - Ron Woodruff
ANTI-RANDOLOGY by Ron Woodruff
For the LUCK-/y do SMILE/ for the NEED-/y please TRY/ when in MOURN-/ing do CRY.
We are BE-/ ings of Flesh/ we are TRAPPED/ in this MESH/ love don't QUEST-/ion MORE.
Is it HARD-/er to SEE/ the small DIFF'-/rences plea:/ we are KIN/ 'til we DIE.
for the CHILD-/ ren we HOPE/ on the GLOB-/al scope WE/ must spread LOVE'S/ blessed SPORE.
Ron
About This Poem
Last Few Words: It feels a bit choppy to me as a first run. Please let me know if I hit it. I still felt I had to do Hexameter and at least strive for meaning inside the poem. I hope you enjoy it and I hope it's correct. Thanks, Ron
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
11 years 9 months ago
A hit.
A palpable hit.
You have been a most excellent participant in this workshop.
BlueDemon77
11 years 9 months ago
Thank you sir, I had hoped it would all come back to me.
Thanks for the very kind words. Thanks to Rula and you for acting as a well oiled machine.
Ron
BlueDemon77
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Wesley! Hi Rula!
Am I to suppose that the revisions I made to my Anapestic Hexameter quatrain fixed the problem? I haven't heard anything about the revision or how metrically correct it is after the changes.
Please let me know,
Thanks,
Ron Woodruff (BlueDemon77)
wesley snow
11 years 8 months ago
No revisions were needed.
You hit it on the head. Start working on a final poem. Dactyl/Trochee or Anapest/Iamb. Three quatrains any length.