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CCfire
CCfire
Jun 08, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

angry fish

your eyes and mouth
don't match
it gave you
an off-centered
look

we argued
made up
made love
walked in storms
dripped rain
made love again
discussed my country
falling into the ocean

your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed

i am filled with ghosts
yours and mine
i have opinions on
the death of death
and love, if
that's what we had

your eyes and mouth
are still out of kilter but
i consider you
the finest month
i ever lived

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Neruda, Rumi, Gibran, Jeffers, Corso, Waldman, Kerouac

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Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

14 years 1 month ago

i have opinions on

i have opinions on
the death of death

loved this CC. This was an excellent piece. Perfect depiction of a quickie affair and the memories (ghosts) that follow behind us even years after it;s over. Sometimes, it ends being the biggest love affair in a life time. Loved this, very descriptive work.

K. Mulroney

K

Kailashana2

14 years 1 month ago

I read this one to Barry

I read this one to Barry yesterday (he's the poet I met here & now live with & a sometime-muse). He said, and I quote him: Mmmmmmmmmmmm. For him that's a lot.

The *finest month I ever lived* reminds me of an old movie called *Sweet November*, remade a decade ago with Keanu Reeves, Charlize Theron (I enjoyed both versions, guess I qualify for the WSMLA*)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7GrK5THh9_k

Angry Fish! I have to say the words: fucking brilliant.

~A

*weepy sentimental movie lover award

loved

loved

14 years 1 month ago

PARDON my intrusion

is Barry a libra or too egoistic sun leo!!
only for my information please.
THANKS

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 1 month ago

Tell Barry I am glad he said

Tell Barry I am glad he said something then :) I did think the title suited it lol but you'd have to know the person I am talking about I think to get the full story and I might keep it for another poem lol