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Jan 29, 2026
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Another ink
Hearsay depicts,
there's a tide,
That invades our shores.
But I say
these truths flow
when propaganda pours.
Their words,
Of ferocious intent,
Spew collective hate,
And I hear,
The subtext,
Within this trait.
And the evil,
That's hidden,
At its core.
Makes me,
Wonder what more,
Could be in store.
As people,
Turn backs,
On sorrowful sound.
Ignore the tears,
With heartless thoughts,
They sit abound.
And in its wake,
We're left,
In a pot, that's heated.
Fear is bubbling,
And we're sadly,
Here defeated.
If only,
We could find,
A way to fight.
These words,
Of fear and hate,
If only, we might.
But have,
The courage,
To stop this spell.
To trust,
Our hearts, perhaps
Our humanity could tell.
Different strokes
Another way,
To hear, to think,
And see our world,
So we might change,
This fateful ink.
About This Poem
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neopoet
2 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the pervasive influence of propaganda and collective fear, using metaphor and rhythm to convey a sense of urgency and despair. The central metaphor of "ink" as a symbol for the spreading of harmful ideas is effective, suggesting how words can stain or shape perception.
The poem’s structure, with its short lines and frequent line breaks, creates a staccato rhythm that mirrors the fragmented and unsettling nature of the message being conveyed. This approach works well to emphasize certain words and phrases, such as "ferocious intent," "fear is bubbling," and "fateful ink," lending weight to the emotional core.
However, some lines could benefit from more precise or vivid imagery to deepen the impact. For example, phrases like "a pot that's heated" and "subtext within this trait" are somewhat abstract or generic; replacing these with more concrete or original images might enhance the reader’s engagement. Additionally, the poem occasionally leans toward stating ideas rather than showing them—inviting more sensory details or metaphorical language could help embody the themes more fully.
The final stanza’s call for "different strokes" and a new way to "hear, to think, and see our world" is a hopeful turn, but it might gain strength by more explicitly connecting to the earlier imagery or by offering a more distinctive vision of change.
Overall, the poem successfully communicates a critical perspective on propaganda and social apathy, but refining the imagery and tightening the language could elevate its emotional resonance and clarity.
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Geezer
2 months 3 weeks ago
The tempo....
and even the subject matter makes me think of late-middle ages poetry of the "Bards". I think that a skilled orator would make a few changes in the pauses and separate thoughts, but the theme is well done. ~ Geez.
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