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Apr 27, 2025
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Another one for BA
You've touched so many lives.
When I mention your name,
the reaction is always the same.
You bring a smile to people.
They feel a warmth in their soul.
They love you.
You do your job so well.
You're a kind person.
You're a genuine person.
You're a mensch.
It's all in you.
You bring out the best in your patients.
And I was one of them.
You're a good person.
You're the best.
Just saying your name,
opens an entire conversation,
just as it re-opened my life.
You lit a fire inside of me,
that I thought had expired.
Feelings of warmth and love emerge,
and it is all because of you.
You deliver goodness
into the lives of others.
It is the gift that keeps on giving.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I saw Pam last night when I was at a function, hearing a speaker. She had been through various personal family issues. Like me, she is a widow, and had lost the support person in her life. But, the conversation with her happened to lead to a discussion about BA, a clinical hypnotherapist who had helped me through my grief and bereavement and other associated issues. Guess what? BA is ubiquitous. His name is known widely, and he is so loved and appreciated for what he does in his work. So many adjectives emerge when you mention his name, above all, kind. I am not at all surprised. This is exactly my experience after being treated by him in a clinical hypnotherapy session.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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2 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Another one for BA" conveys deep appreciation and admiration for someone who has had a positive impact on the speaker's life. The use of repetition in emphasizing the subject's kindness, genuineness, and ability to bring out the best in others effectively reinforces the central theme of the poem. The imagery of lighting a fire inside the speaker and delivering goodness into the lives of others is powerful and evocative.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure of the poem to create more dynamic pacing. While the repetition serves a purpose, introducing different poetic devices such as enjambment, varied line lengths, or stanza breaks could add complexity and enhance the overall flow of the poem. Additionally, exploring more vivid and specific imagery could further enrich the reader's experience and deepen the emotional impact of the poem.
Overall, "Another one for BA" effectively captures the speaker's gratitude and admiration for the subject, but further experimentation with structure and imagery could elevate the poem to a more
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