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c lynn brooks

Jun 06, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Another Song

See her awaiting in the wings
feel her gently tug at your heart strings

She is whispering words yet unclear
words she hopes that you will hear

Her thoughts are being tossed and thrown
to the watching wolves that howl and moan

She waits for the one that holds the key
never knowing who that one might be

Her heart knows where it should belong
still she knows that is another song

So watch her waiting in the wings
then feel as she gently tugs your heart strings

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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5 years 1 month ago

Another Song

Hi, Chrys,
This is beautiful! I feel it is the birth of a song.
Thank you,
L

C

5 years 1 month ago

lavender

Thank you so much. I wrote this for a very dear friend of mine who was an entertainer at the time

5 years 1 month ago

nice song

minor typo last line
lynn

C

5 years 1 month ago

lovedly

thank you
corrected the typo thanks for catching that

5 years 1 month ago

Hello C lynn

A very tender song... I especially like the "waiting in the wing line". I thought you could spice this song up with more internal rhymes if you see what I mean.
Just an opinion dear. The choice is always yours.

C

5 years 1 month ago

Rula

you are the 2nd person to call it a song it really isn't what would you suggest as far as spice lol seriously I'm open to all suggestions

C

5 years 1 month ago

Alan

thank you taking the time
I did use your corrections but am still tossing waiting and awaiting around not sure awaiting is sitting with me

T

5 years 1 month ago

there's a certain kind of

there's a certain kind of beauty here, it makes me dream of a pure innocents that one should never hurt.

C

5 years 1 month ago

Tyro

Thank you for your kind words

C

5 years 1 month ago

Teddy

I saw the changes immediately and they are so subtle that bith versions sit well
thanks for your input