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Anubis Hunts...

The dark, moonless night is silent
but for a panting breath
He slinks among the gravestones
his presence, meaning death

Hunting alone just thrills him
he needs to run and play
Anubis loves his master, but...
he needs to have his way

Chasing down his victim
growling, tearing their clothes
is much better than the hunting
when everybody goes

He likes Sir Gee, but his meals
aren't tasty as his own
He likes to strip the meat from prey
chew upon their bones

The master shares his taste
for sinful meat, it's sweet!
Killer taught him to love the ugly
evil is so good to eat

His ears pick up the footfalls
of the robbing, rapist villain
He paces silent to meet him
His blood is hot and willing

The man surprised at the spectere
wants only to make friends
then sees those teeth all showing
knows what that message sends

He pulls a gleaming knife
when he sees the truth
He never gets to use it
his hand punctured by a tooth

Blood squirts out to spray
the man sees it in the air
The beast licks it up and grins
the man wants out of there!

Another bite is enough
the guy takes to his heels
running pumps the blood up
Excitement makes good meals!

Chase him down and nip him
bites just to slow him some
Rip the skin and muscle
tear his throat, before screams come

Lead the Master to the body
get rid of the evidence
Don't want the cops to find it
can't give them half a chance

One more monster that isn't missed
they may wonder just a bit
they will think he's fled the city
they've chased him out of it

"A good one, my Anubis
we've got another one
there's more meat for the freezer
and you've had some fun!"

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I thought that some might like hearing from Anubis' perspective for a change!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 1 month ago

dear Anubis,

I loved your tale/tail of your strategies on hunting! this was an exhilarating piece...you really got my blood pumping with the fast paced run. (loved the title) it is good to see life through your eyes. I was right there with you until the end... a tasty morsel of a treat!

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

p.s
why don't more poets have alter ego's? it is so freeing, having one...you can do anything you want and be anyone or anything!

*

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 1 month ago

I'm not sure...

of why more people don't write as alter-egos. You are right, it is very liberating!
I thought that my hunting ways might be interesting for you to know, I have hunted with the Master and his brother many times. I do like Sir Gee, but I don't understand his dislike for the meat the Master and I share. He says that it is not right, but how can something that tastes so good, not be right? Humans are so strange. He is a good one though, he helps us with the bad people and he kills almost as well as we do. I like his horse too. Too bad it is not a bad one, it would be fun to chase! Thanks for reading about me. ~ Anubis.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 1 month ago

dear Anubis,

I am looking forward to reading more from you about your trials and such.

ever, eddy
& Cat

Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 1 month ago

Poetic devices!

The poem is charged with some literary devices that makes it evocative. I love stanza one: Personifying "dark" as human being.

The dark, moonless night is silent
but for a panting breath
He slinks among the gravestones
his presence, meaning death

Mostly, using poetic devices in poetry makes the poem to stand out and enhance the rhythm, meaning and intensifies the mood or feelings of the poem.

Beautifully crafted poem Gee..

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 1 month ago

Thank you Jack...

You seem to be catching on. Thanks for the great review! ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 1 month ago

You are welcome

Yes indeed, I'm catching on. I studied English & Literature. I can easily spot literary devices in any poem.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 1 month ago

Anubis

My favorite Egyptian God, along side Bastet. It is a pleasure to make your acquaintance. The first four lines are my favorite. Really sets the stage and captures the mood. Loved it.

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 1 month ago

Thanks...

I have wanted to have a part in the telling for a long time. I don't get out by myself much and when do, I like
to have a little fun. This was a perfect opportunity for me, the Master set me out to watch for the perp and when I saw that I had the chance to take him down by myself, I took advantage. Of course, I needed help to get rid of the body, so I ran home to get the Master. He gave me lots of pets and told me how good I am! ~ Anubis.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 1 month ago

Anubis

I look forward to more of your adventures in future writings. You are an excellent choice of companion for Killer and Sir Gee.