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lovedly
lovedly
Sep 27, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ANXIOUS Eh!

Await be not anxious mates
change your ancient thoughts
anaconda and apple
without any seed
how would you
as a creature now
or ever be

there would be no
buds nor flowers
in any valley
hope you are
applying your modern mind
as is being done
by those more rational now
of current scientific mankind
need one now you remind
the origins
since ages of humankind

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Gracy

Gracy

4 years 9 months ago

Dear lovedly, I confess that

Dear lovedly, I confess that I don't quite understand the gist of your poem. There are also some grammatical bumps along the way. Sorry, not meaning to offend, but you say you want the raw truth.
I think that with a bit of tweaking it could become a lovely poem. All the best, Gracy

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 9 months ago

Dear lovedly, none of us

Dear lovedly, none of us write diamond poetry! I love yours very much, just think they need a bit of tweaking, but that's just my opinion. All the best, Gracy