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This poem is part of the contest:

November contest : Naked trees

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ANYTHING FOR ATTENTION (Nov. Contest)

On the same corner every day
stands one as slender as can be.
Once in a while her form might sway
almost with sexuality.

Too many folks have passed her by
hardly giving her a glance.
Perhaps they can not even see
that she just needs a chance.

Until at last in desperation
as coolness tints the autumn air
she changes her coat's coloration
in hope that folks will see her there.

And they look but that is all.
She feels their eyes upon her form
and thinks they'd like to see it All.
They'd see that shed that which keeps her warm.

So at last she slowly strips
on that corner for all who care to see
underneath a sky that wanly drips
until her limbs are all set free.

And now she quivers in the wind
as her frock lays all around;
an embarrassed sugar maple tree
autumn leaves all on the ground.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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scribbler

7 years 7 months ago

Hi Steph

Scansion is my Achilles heel I think. I tend to put stresses where I want them instead of where they really are lol. I reckon you already know I'm an editaholic at times so you can be assured even this little contest poem will eventually get another look. And when it does I'll certainly keep you ideas in mind......stan........WHAT??? spell check says no such word as editaholic

lovedly

lovedly

7 years 7 months ago

Very nice

hope in winter
when nude or naked
the bark tightens in
and keeps all
insides warm

S

scribbler

7 years 7 months ago

Yep

Nature has its ways of warding off the cold

Geezer

Geezer

7 years 7 months ago

Damn!...

Wish I had thought of this one! Really great story, with all the innuendo and simile. Just the kind of thing that I love. I would agree with Steph. but fat lot of good it would do this old Geezer. I've been after you for years, to take a little more pride in your pattern, rhythm and so on. Well, maybe because she is a pretty, young thing she will have better luck than I. Lol
Good story, nice picture and mostly, well done! ~ Gee.
.

S

scribbler

7 years 7 months ago

Now, now

You are pretty and young too..........LMAO! But I would have thought you noticed I'm editing stuff all the time. I'm posting little enough lately as is without waiting to perfect a poem before posting. But OK I'll try to do better you cute thing.........stan