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Apr 13, 2025
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appraisal
We are wise not to meddle
with the words of yon Muse,
allowing them to touch us--
avowed by torchlit trysts;
each thought cradled in nettles'
elegiac vine rows muse
such fearsome elegance behold!
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
2 months 4 weeks ago
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "appraisal" uses rich imagery and a formal tone to explore the idea of respecting the power of the Muse's words. The use of words like "wise," "torchlit trysts," and "fearsome elegance" creates a sense of reverence and mystery. However, the poem's structure could benefit from more consistency in meter and rhyme scheme to enhance its flow and impact. Additionally, the imagery of "nettles' elegiac vine rows" could be further developed to deepen the reader's understanding of the Muse's influence. Consider refining these elements to strengthen the overall impact of the poem.
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Frederick Kesner
2 months 4 weeks ago
revised to accommodate redactive suggestions:
We dare not meddle with her art,
the words of yon Muse, sharp yet fair.
They carve their mark, they touch the heart—
a shadow’s grace, a whispered air.
Avowed by torchlit trysts, we stand,
entranced by tales in flickering glow.
Her thoughts take root in nettled land,
where elegiac vine rows grow.
Through tangled depths, her whispers weave,
a fearsome elegance revealed.
Her silent vow, we must believe—
a truth within the dark concealed.
Candlewitch
2 months 4 weeks ago
you taught me...
a new word: (elegiac) thank you :)
my favorite lines:
We are wise not to meddle
with the words of yon Muse,
allowing them to touch us--
but I am wondering why you choose to use (--) when an ellipsis (...) would do here? These are the reasons why I use three periods also known as an ellipsis:
Three periods in writing, known as an ellipsis, indicate that words have been omitted, suggest a pause, or imply that there is something left unsaid. It can also be used to create suspense or to show a trailing off in thought.
anyway, I very much admire your poem.
fondly, Cat
Frederick Kesner
2 months 4 weeks ago
Oh that… yes… the choice was
Oh that… yes… the choice was to trail off or to give a sense of a cut-off bridging, like a visual enjambment since a line break and new paragraph/stanza gives a strong visual cue of separation, perhaps too strong; but still allowing the reader to decide how much connection to assign the ‘disconnected’ lines. Thank you so much for taking that up. Much appreciated.
Candlewitch
2 months 4 weeks ago
Dear cripticbard,
Thank you so very much for clearing that up with an understandable explanation.
many smiles Cat