Rula

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The Art of Heart [Title workshop]

How would an art
be an art
if it hurts,
if it doesn't bring
a heart to a heart,
if it doesn't stop
a war, or if it gets
a war to start?

Poets aren't just
dream-makers, but
rather the successors
of messengers,

With their
messages poets
can bring the whole
humanity
together
with a clean pen
and a clean heart.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I have many titles in mind... Let's see whose will match with my thoughts. I have to admit though that I am happy with mine. LoL

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Rula

5 years ago

Dear Teddy

Your suggestions are always welcome, but my line supposed to say that (poetry) as an art should only bring the good to humanity and life.
I don't see how artists hurt, or do you mean are hurt?

tyro

5 years ago

Hi dear Rula

Hi dear Rula
please excuse me for going into semantics, I do not if I am right it is just my feeling. In your title I feel heart is the subject and art the modifier, whereas in -the heart of art- I feel art is the subject and heart the modifier.
Since we are talking about titles what came to me was the purity of art, with art the subject and purity the modifier.

Rula

5 years ago

Dear Tyro

Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
I'm not sure I'm getting your point. By titling "The Art of Heart", I wanted to say that poetry is not any art but the art of love (as heart usually the symbol of love)
Now does that in your opinion contradict with the title in any way?

Geezer

5 years ago

The art of heart...

While I cannot agree that poetry should always bring good to the reader, I will admit that the [Art] of the heart should be about how good [or bad] the writer brings the heart to the reader. Nice job of illustrating that the heart is touched by what we write. ~ Geezer.
.

lovedly

5 years ago

can I disagree ...you skipped me again..Rula

With their
messages poets
CAN bring the whole
humanity
together
with a CLEAR pen
and a OPEN heart.

SOME LOVE BLACK ART
What now thou sayest
of ARCHAIC harts
like butter jam tarts
poets have now gone off track
sad

all want a NOBEL
Four *** POETIC HEART
What of art
not many read poetry today
visit other sites
all *** display
poets galore
to make money*** more

Rula

5 years ago

Geezer

You got through to my message. So I would take this as a yes to the title?

Geezer

5 years ago

Yes...

is the word. I think the title fits perfectly. ~ Geezer.
.

scribbler

5 years ago

Hi desert flower

Since this is the poem which you think could use a stronger/different title I'd suggest "POET'S PURPOSE"

Rula

5 years ago

Interesting

thank you Stan for the suggestion and teddy for the approval.
Are we supposed to edit the titles immediately as suggested?

scribbler

5 years ago

NO

In fact you don't even Have to use Any of the titles . But any one of the suggestions if not used Might just inspire a new title of your own