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ART'S FAILINGS
I would sketch you with a stylus
your graceful curving lines
running through a new mowed field
bordered by blooming multiflora vines
Or maybe I should sculpt your form
in some type of classic pose
carved in clay or wood or stone
with the merest hint of clothes
Perhaps a water color painting
in impressionistic style
all pastel with blended edges
to best capture that fleeting smile
Maybe i could write a story
that begins with when we met
then reveals all our shared life
but such tale hasn't ended yet
I know a poem can't capture you
so should I even try
to put in verse the girl I see
through early morn's half opened eye?
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
13 years 11 months ago
Dear Stan,
Hmm,
This sounds familiar... wonder where I saw it before, LOL! Just as good as the first reading. Love the sentiment and construct!
always, Cat
scribbler
13 years 11 months ago
Hi Cat
There are a few things which drift from here to there and maybe back lol.Glad you dropped by.........again...........stan