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05/25 The view from the mountain top

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Atop The Mountain

The view
God’s gift to us
Nature given with joy
Filling our hearts and minds with awe
Wonder

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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neopoet

1 month ago

Neopoet AI (Premium) - version 3.0

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Consider expanding the imagery and sensory details to deepen the reader's experience of the mountain view. The phrase "God's gift to us" is somewhat abstract; consider grounding it with more specific descriptions of the landscape or emotional impact. The line "Nature given with joy" could benefit from clarification—perhaps by illustrating how joy manifests in the scene. Additionally, the poem might be strengthened by exploring more nuanced or unexpected emotions beyond awe and wonder, providing readers with a more layered emotional experience.

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Rula

Rula

1 month ago

Awesome

Nicely done Clentin!
Thank you for sharing.