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Jul 08, 2021
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Aussieland is Calling...
I'd like to live down-under
In Aussieland by the sea
With wallabies and waves of thunder
And Eucalyptus trees
The Outback filled with the songs
Of Kookaburra birds
And frog-filled billabongs
Grasslands and kangaroo herds
I'd listen through the night
To Aboriginal didgeridoos
Watch the sun come up bright
Look for spiders in my shoes
Ahhhh, the call of the wild
The Outback calling me
Me, a nature-child
A regular Croc Dundee
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 11 months ago
Thanks...
I was wondering; would it be better if I said in the first stanza: Australia, instead of Aussieland? ~ Geez.
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Triskelion
3 years 11 months ago
Australia
seems more formal than Aussieland. I like the friendly flair of Aussieland more. It's a fine poem with it's light-hearted appeal. Nicely done!
Thomas
Geezer
3 years 11 months ago
Thank you Sir...
The informal light-hearted approach is definitely what I am going for. My Aussie friends are pleased with my work and say that I hit it right on! ~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey
3 years 11 months ago
"Aussieland", every time,
"Aussieland", every time, and I would advocate more colloquiums,
more earthy, in your face Australian couldn't care less language.
this is really good, worth working on.
Obi.
Geezer
3 years 11 months ago
Thanks man...
I kinda want to keep it like it is, to keep the "average reader", [not an Aussie] from tripping over themselves in trying to understand colloquiums. This is easy for the everyday reader to understand, with just basic knowledge of Australia. ~ Geez.
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scribbler
3 years 10 months ago
Aussieland
Give it more a state of mind feeling I think. BTW congrats on the win
Geezer
3 years 10 months ago
Thanks...
Going to Australia is on my bucket-list. Unfortunately, I will probably 'kick' the bucket before that happens unless I win the lottery. LoL
~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
3 years 10 months ago
Congrats!
Fun read - well done!
Geezer
3 years 10 months ago
Thank you...
I had lots of fun writing this one. ~ Geez.
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Lamington
3 years 10 months ago
I have never heard the term
I have never heard the term "Aussieland" in my many visits to Australia.
I think "Ozzieland", "the Land of Oz" or even just plain "Oz" would be better and more Australian They also like "Godzone country" !!!
PS: "Aussie" is always pronouncied "Ozzie"!
PPS These PC/woke days "aborigine" is regarded as patronising and even offensive to some ...the US equivalent might be "red indian"...
Seren
3 years 9 months ago
Ello Lamginton
Sorry to butt in here but Our Chant is Aussie Aussie Aussie oi oi oi and Ozzie to me being an Australian is a character here. I use Oz as in my country but I am Aussie. I live in town with a massive Koori/Aboriginal population and I've never heard of people of Aboriginal origin being offended at being called that. My cousin is half Koori and my niece is also among a heap of other family. My next door neighbour is Koori as well. In my neighbourhood there are tons. Having a lot of friends who're Koori I was curious who told you this. It's a misconception. Maybe somewhere someone is offended by being called that but not in any of the communities I know of. Most of the Koori organisations have Aboriginal in their title. Hope you aren't offended by my addressing this. I do it with good intent.
Kindest regards Jayne.
Lamington
3 years 9 months ago
I bow to your local knowledge.
I bow to your local knowledge. However, please note the following article:
https://www.abc.net.au/news/2011-12-15/dillon---political-correctness3a…
PS. How would you pronounce "Aussie"? (with a zz or an ss?)
Best wishes
L.
Seren
3 years 9 months ago
Ello Bro
One day we are going to bring you here. Congratulations on the win I am so over the moon for you. I love your poem as it is. It's so nice to be back among my family again.. I've missed this.
Bravo take a bow.
Love and higgliest bugs Jayne xxx
lovedly
3 years 9 months ago
I'd rather meet the Aussies
before I kick the bucket
before there I land
ru coming Gee
hand in hand
lol
Geezer
3 years 5 months ago
Hmmmm...
Long as you can buy your own ticket, you can come. ~ Geez.
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Seren
3 years 5 months ago
Wooooohooooooooooo
Congratulations Bro I am so happy you won. You deserve it. I'm so happy for you!!!
Love & higgliest bugs your Aussie Sis. <3<3
Geezer
3 years 5 months ago
Thanks...
Sis, it's on my bucket list!
~ Gee.
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Geezer
3 years 5 months ago
Thank you all...
that voted for my poem. It means the world to me, that I wrote something that made so many of you feel is worthy of the honor of Poem Of the Year. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly
3 years 5 months ago
CONGRATS GEE
FROM DOWN UNDER ME
NO TICKET NEEDED
SENT BY JESS HAA NOT FREE
Jackweb
3 years 5 months ago
Congratulations to you - Geezer!
The poem is creatively crafted with a blend of imagery and invoking vocabulary a deep thoughts in readers mind.
Leslie
1 year 5 months ago
Geezer
Leslie
1 year 5 months ago
Geezer
I thought it was awesome . I read a book by Marlo Morgan i
n which she went on a walkabout with the aborigines. It's a cool book
Great poem, it rang true with what I know!.You would really like it!
Leslie
1 year 5 months ago
Geezer
I thought it was awesome . I read a book by Marlo Morgan
in which she went on a walkabout with the aborigines. It's a cool book
Great poem, it rang true with what I know!.You would really like it!
Geezer
1 year 5 months ago
Thank you...
Please go easy on that enter button. ~ Geez.
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Seren
1 year 4 months ago
With our love we can save the
With our love we can save the world. - George Harrison
The fact that we've never met. But the love lives here in this place, amongst you beautiful souls. Oh oh oh I think I have a poem ruminating.
I love you big bro. Higgliest bugs xxx
Geezer
1 year 4 months ago
It's so nice...
to see you! I hope you are recovering well. It pains me to think that my sis is having health problems again. I miss seeing you around. Hope you post one soon. ~ Geez.
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Izzi Reinier
1 year 1 month ago
Catching Up
Hello again Geezer. Am obviously new to this site and am enjoying the poetry that you have all contributed over the journey .I live in Australia , in the Mallee Region of Victoria , your words perfectly describe where I livre and have lived for most of my 70 years.
Regards
Izzi
Geezer
1 year 1 month ago
I'm so glad...
that I got it right. If you have read the previous comments, you will see that I've never been to Australia, but it's on my bucket list. If I ever hit the lottery... I have read many things about Aussieland, and I followed the T.V. programs for many years, so I feel like I would love to make the trip. ~ Geezer.
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